Is this a good scene for my book?

I want to be honest of course. You write good but then i'm looking for a dramatic details. It lacks the description of the characters emotion towards the event that is happening.Example: "She didn't hear the rest. There's something anxious inside her that seems to be persuading her ears to turn on the other side of the place." or something like that? like...more description. This is just my own opinion being an aspiring writer. I'm working on my book as well (if you're doing the same thing). Good luck to your writing!